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             When I crush the head of a clover bloom, the scent carries me to that far off field where my weed battered knees cut trails by the blackberry bush. Where the old man let us feast on his jam flavored crop of wild fruit, and told us tales of when his hair was crowned with dandelion fluff. Where the overhead hum of power lines cursing the heat of summer was the only thread we used to find our way back home. Where the king of the day was crowned based upon who found the biggest possum skull, or smashed the tallest crawdad hole; swearing he fought off its occupant, who was the size of Bobby’s dog. Back then, the trash of ditches was pirate swag, or royal treasure. A baseball bat swollen with ditch water was a giant’s club. A thorny weed was the last proof of an ancient forest.
              Time ran slow there, meandering with bees that passed, honey-drunk in zigzags before our eyes. They were as shameless as we explorers, who trampled grass, and danced around blossoms as if we were avoiding primed traps. We knew our place in the field. It was indifferent of us some days. Others, it was proud of its unburied vaults; parting brush in our presence to reveal a giant beetle, or some flower we swore was a color never seen before. We abided its rules, always entering by the same hopped fence, and landing on the same smashed grass threshold of the day before. We always followed butterflies, knowing them to be the guides in that flat Heaven. We never crushed a perfect blossom, or ran from a passing bee, fearing we’d curse the day’s expedition.
               That’s how summers went: passing our days in another place, a country on another plane, separate and safe from school books or bed times, where we listened to the wind whisper those secret things that had to be tapped out in tree branches to be understood.
                Until one day, we hopped the fence, eager to uncover an apple core buried the week before, so we could see what the soil did with our offering. That’s the day when we lost the field. Every bull nettle stem, beetle blanket, and every other thing and place that we’d named in the sacred kid tongue had been torn away. The whole of it severed at the stalk. We all whimpered that the cicada shell we’d crushed the week before was to blame, but I knew that wasn’t the reason. The world we came from was jealous of our hiding place; of the last patch of magic that it may have been weaved out of long ago.
               I grew sick at the scent of all those headless flowers, left piled up in mounds by the force that had broken them all in one swing. I wept for the bees that lay like striped raisins dying of thirst far off in some front lawn garden, whose blooms were dust compared to the potent nectar they’d grown accustomed to.
               I still dance around perfect blossoms, and frown when I see a bee shining thirsty in the Sun.
©2008-2009 ~DarlingDante
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Author's Comments

This prose piece is about a subject very near to my heart: a fond and upsetting childhood memory that changed me for good.

I've always wanted to write this, but it had to come out on its own, and I'm mystified by it.

I'd love to hear everyone's feedback on this.

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Wild Flower Crimes by ~DarlingDante: when did you grow up? (Suggested by ~tigerlove72 and Featured by `GeneratingHype)

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:iconministermonster:
Great story! If I ever own a field Ima never mow it.
:icondraak-shadow:
Really nice, good description =P

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:iconbunkingum:
Great imagery. I like how you imply that the area was turned into a store or a gas station or something society really doesnt need.
:iconelectrobaby:
I could smell everything. A lovely piece. I feel like the ending kind of left me hanging for a bit more, but this was extremely well written, and thank you for sharing.

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:icondarlingdante:
Thank you for the kind words.

I chose the abruptness of the ending based upon memory and how quickly my childhood playground was gone. Then I tried to end on an image of me at my present age recalling the memory, in an effort to come full circle. I'll look back over to see if there is anything I left out, or if the pacing needs to be changed.

Thanks for the comment!
:iconseptdeneuf:
It's very meaningful and a beautiful description. The imagery is well thought out, and it's easy to see the scene unfold. I think it's a sad ending.

I think it's also a great thing that you used one of your own experiences for this.
:icondarlingdante:
Thanks for the kind words and the journal feature.
:iconmsklystron:
The language and imagery are utterly stunning. It's like taking my senses back to my childhood and my own meadow. The scent of the beheaded clover in the opening captured may attention and drew me into your vivid, sensual remembrances and the moment when childhood was ripped from you. We all face that moment , but in this piece you convey the feeling so beautifully.

Well done!

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